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prose summary of a comic book story, is the format used for submitting stories
to companies such as DC Comics. In one page, a writer must describe the plot
while also trying to make it as intriguing as possible. It's quite a challenge!
gives YOU, the reader, the chance to critique the story before a writer sends
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The Plot Outline:
After a nasty nightmare, Shayera Thal, Hawkwoman,
decides its finally time to go looking for Katar Hol, Hawkman.
The first thing she does is track down the Nth metal wings Katar
buried prior to the Hawk-God coming to earth. Poof: Hawkwoman is
Hawkwoman then goes to the JLA (specifically Jonn)
for help in finding Katar. Jonn recounts their last adventure
together and fills everyone in on Katars status in Limbo.
(Background on Zero Hour and the adventures that led to Katars
banishment in Limbo is provided). Zauriel listens intently and deduces
that Arion sent Hawkman to the Ghost Dimension a.k.a. Prometheus
The JLA summons Arion, and theyre off to
the Ghost Dimension. When they arrive, Prometheus is missing from
his house (hes been gone for awhile), but they do find a whole
mess of Hawkmen floating about. Most of them are ghost-like, but
Katar is still very real. Arion and Zauriel open a doorway to the
afterlife, and all of the ghosts go on their way (including the
Golden Age Hawks).
The JLA is about to leave when the Hawk-God attacks.
Hes magical, so most of the heroes are affected. Things look
grim, but then the Golden Age Hawks show up. Theyre not ghosts
anymore, but angels. They have all the powers of Zauriel, and with
the JLAs help, they defeat the Hawk-God.
Everyone says their good-byes. The Hawks return
to heaven with the Hawk-God in tow, and the JLA returns home.
Hawkman comes to once they leave the Ghost Dimension.
He starts to cry.
The voices, theyve stopped, he
says, I thought I was going to go mad, but I did it, I saved
them all. (Hawkman basically went comatose in order to keep
all the different souls separate and intact while they were in the
Epilogue: The Ghost Dimension. Prometheus pops
back into his house only to find it trashed. Eh? What the hell happened
Hawkman As a result of his merging
during Zero Hour, Katar now has the Nth metal within
his body. As a result, he has super strength and can grow
his wings. I think Hawkmans last look was pretty cool, so
Im going to recommend he keep it besides, hes
got an action figure. :-)
Hawkwoman A normal Thanagarian with
Nth metal wings. The Nth metal still provides
anti-gravity powers even though the Hawk-God is gone.
The Hawk-God Basically, an insane
high level angel. The Hawk-God came to this plane thousands of years
ago. Several other Gods followed him, and soon they
began using Avatars to fight each other. (These are all the guys
Hawkman fought in his Post-Zero Hour adventures.)
Katars father imprisoned the Hawk-God years
ago to prevent it from wreaking havoc on the universe. During the
Zero Hour conflict, the Hawk-God escaped its prison, trashed Thanagar,
and came to earth in search of Hawkman. (The Hawk-God can sense
the Nth metal that Thanagarians use to fly, but it does
not power this mystery metal.)
Once the Hawk-God came to Earth, the universe was
destroyed. As a result, Hawkman merged with all the various avatars
the Hawk-God had absorbed and all the Hawkmen from across the space
time continuum. In other words, Hawkman was a mess. With all these
various people running around inside his head, Katar Hol went insane.
In a last ditch effort to save him, Arion the Immortal and Jonn
Jonzz banished Katar to Limbo. He remains there to this day.
Script for "Homeward Bound", Hawkman; The Return
A medium shot of Hawkmans skeleton. The skeleton is wearing
the current Hawkman costume and has whats left of Katars
real wings spread out behind it. The skeleton needs to look alive,
as it will be saying something.
SHAYERA, SAVE ME.
Skeleton-Hawkman is now in shackles, chained to a floor in a very
dark dungeon. He looks at the camera and beings to talk
to us. The camera circles around Hawkman and we can see another
figure chained next to him: its Shayera Thal, Hawkwoman (NOTE:
Shayera is very alive and NOT in her Hawkwoman costume.) Therere
a few panels of the Hawks talking, and then Shayeras shackles
YOURE FREE. YOUVE ALWAYS BEEN FREE.
Then a giant bird-like shadow moves over the two surprised Hawks
Cut to Shayera Thal (Hawkwoman) screaming, sitting up in bed. Shayera
is sweating with tears in her eyes. Shes wearing some sort
of nightshirt, with the blankets all twisted around her. She gets
up and begins to get dressed as she thinks about Katar. As she puts
on her pants she comes eye to eye with her old Hawkwoman helmet
that is sitting on top of her dresser. We need a close up of Shayera
and then the eyes of the helmet. In this scene Shayera realizes
its time for Katar to come home.
Shot of the Detroit Police Station. Dawn. Inside we see Shayera
and her partner talking. Shayera is packing up a box of her belongings.
Shayera tells Purlie (her partner) about her dream and Katar (getting
the exposition out of the way.) She has a plan to bring him home.
Purlie says she understands, and tells Shayera she can always come
back to Detroit.
The desert, somewhere in the southwest. Its very hot. Shayera
is following some sort of treasure map and with her is a Native
American boy. She drops her belongings and removes a short shovel
from her backpack. She then begins to dig. We need three similar
panels going across the page of Shayera digging. Within each panel
Shayera is digging as the dirt pile behind her is getting bigger.
Finally she hits something hard and unearths her old Thanagarian
SHAYERA (with a
slight grin): YES, WINGS.
Shot of the JLA Watchtower. Inside, JOnn JOnzz, Zauriel
and a few other heroes are standing around the JLA table when the
teleporter activates. Alarms start to go off as the unannounced
visitor beams in. Hawkwoman, in full uniform, steps out of the tube
and announces herself (Insert HAWKWOMAN logo here.)
Later. A shot of the JLA roundtable with the entire JLA seated.
Most of the JLA are listening to JOnn speak. Orion looks bored.
Plastic Man is goofing off.
FLASH: SO, LET ME
GET THIS STRAIGHT, HAWKMAN IS TRAPPED IN LIMBO?
JOnn and Hawkwoman go on to explain Hawkmans
last adventure. Cut in a few panels of Hawkman #33 (last series.)
A shot of JOnn and Arion touching the vanishing Hawkman (from
AND THAT WAS IT
WE BANISHED KATAR TO LIMBO.
A close up of Zauriel. From JOnns story he recognizes
its the Ghost Zone
home of Prometheus. Cut in
a quick flashback panel of Prometheus House. Another shot
of the JLA roundtable as the heroes discuss what to do. A few more
close ups of Zauriel, JOnn and finally Superman. They decide
to help Hawkwoman in her quest, but first they must summon Arion.
An unhappy Arion stands before the JLA. They are standing in the
reception area of the JLA Watchtower. A few pleasantries are exchanged
and then <FWASH> the JLA, Hawkwoman, and Arion are in the
The JLA is standing/floating outside of Prometheus House.
YEP, THIS IS THE PLACE.
Flash runs reckon and returns with info.
PROMETHEUS ISNT HERE. IF FACT, I THINK HES BEEN GONE
HAWKWOMAN, YOU CAN SENSE KATAR
WHERE IS HE?
HERE. SOMEWHERE OVER THERE.
Hawkwoman points off to the right.
Hundreds of ghost-like Hawkmen fill the air. They are from different
times and different eras. These are all the people Hawkman merged
with during Zero Hour. Among the bodies are the Golden Age Hawkman
and Hawkgirl, The Silent Knight, and Tomahawk. In the very center
and very tangible is Katar Hol
Hawkman. The JLA hovers silently
in the background.
Suddenly, the Ghost Hawks begin crying for help. They grab anyone
who is near them. This freaks out many of the JLA members. Katar
remains still. They are struggling to free themselves from the ghosts
when Zauriel speaks up.
ZAURIEL: MY FRIENDS
THIS WAY, PLEASE.
Zauriel opens a portal to heaven, and all the ghosts follow the
Hawkwoman is holding Katar. The JLA gathers around. Katar is still
then he comes to life.
THE VOICES, THEYVE STOPPED. I THOUGHT I WAS GOING TO GO MAD
KEEPING THEM SEPARATE. BUT I DID IT. I SAVED THEM ALL.
Katar then notices Shayera holding him. Their eyes
lock, then they embrace in a kiss. The JLA looks on as the reunion
takes place. Superman then officially welcomes Hawkman back to the
land of the living. Then a giant shadow falls upon them all.
The Hawk-God, a huge, giant creature, rips through the JLA. Several
members, including Arion, go spiraling out of control in severe
danger of becoming lost to the void. Hawkman is now back in full
control of himself. Whats left of the JLA begins an assault
on the Hawk-God. Hawkwoman pulls out her gun and begins shooting
at it. Superman starts pounding on it. Green Lantern attacks it
with a giant cat. Plastic Man wraps himself around the Hawk-God.
JOnn fires at it with some Martian heat vision. Hawkman spreads
his wings and charges into battle.
Zauriel darts into battle as well only to get knocked all the way
back to Prometheus House (trashing it in the process.) The
Hawk-God starts swatting JLA members like flies. Many heroes are
WONDER WOMAN: SUPERMAN,
LOOK OUT! ITS USING MAGIC!
Superman gets knocked for a loop. Hawkman manages
to grab the Hawk-God by the neck and flips around so he is "riding"
on its back.
The JLA is still swarming about the Hawk-God. Hawkman pulls out
his katar (the big knife he carryied around after Zero Hour.) He
raises it high above the Hawk-Gods head. We can see some of
the other heroes looking at him, wondering what hell do next.
Hawkman is just about to deliver the deathblow
but he stops.
Hawkman drops the knife and it floats away into Limbo.
Hawkman then puts his hands on the Hawk-Gods temples. He closes
his eyes, and we can see telepathic signals coming from his forehead
(just like Aquaman in the old Superfriends cartoon.) The Hawk-God
ignores the rest of the JLA and focuses on Hawkman. As the Hawk-God
is subdued, he begins to shrink back down to human size. Green Lantern
swoops in and contains the Hawk-God in an energy bubble.
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The Hawk-God is defeated. The JLA heads back to Prometheus
House. Soon they are bathed in light
the angels have come. The
angels are the Golden Age Hawkman and Hawkgirl. They have accepted
positions in the army of light. They explain what happened to themselves
and then request custody of the Hawk-God. Apparently, the Hawk-God
and several other "gods" have been running loose on Earth
for some time. The Golden Age Hawks have been dispatched to gather
up the last missing "god." They promise the Hawk-God will
once again feel the light.
Outside of Prometheus (wrecked) House, good-byes are said,
and the JLA returns home. The angelic Golden Age Hawks, with the
Hawk-God in tow, return to Heaven. As everyone <FWASHES> out
of the Ghost Zone, Prometheus <FWASHES> in.
WHAT THE HELL HAPPENED HERE?
Back at the JLA Watchtower, Superman officially asks Hawkman and
Hawkwoman to join the JLA.
HAWKMAN: IM SORRY, MY FRIENDS, BUT I HAVE TO PUT MY OWN HOUSE
IN ORDER BEFORE I CAN JOIN ANOTHER.
SUPERMAN: WE UNDERSTAND, BUT WHEN YOURE READY THERE WILL ALWAYS
BE A PLACE FOR YOU IN THE JUSTICE LEAGUE (Insert JLA logo here.)